This is mostly to let obseletevulture know that I have come bac

[lightrobber]

A second person has requested the revival of "Twisted Games Of Fate".

I... should finally sit down and rewrite it. Especially now that I have found the perfect (but there is no such thing as perfection) way to start it off (which I have tried - and failed - to do five times already). I think (though I'm not sure) that this time I could really pull it off.


I wonder if I should bother dear obseletevulture with my horrible writing of the old days when Mary-Sues and self-inserts where the hottest stuff and wild OOC was the only way to go. It might provide a brainburn.

Comments

[lightrobber.livejournal.com]

Ah, you just keep spouting praise for my work.

[tenchi-saz.livejournal.com]

Because it deserves to be praised.

[lightrobber.livejournal.com]

But... But I'm a hypocrite. I want concrit!
I want someone to brutally tear it to pieces and tell me what I've done wrong.

*pout*

[tenchi-saz.livejournal.com]

Lol.

Honestly, I couldn't see anything wrong with them. You write them in character, so even though the two situations are completely different in regards to their treatment to one another they are both believable. (That has to be one of the longest sentences eva.) I could very easily see both scenarios played out in my head.

I don't know my brain's acting like pudding at the moment.

They both are great little snippets. I'm not trying to on purposely gush about it or blow smoke up your ass. 'Cause honestly, like I said and keep saying, you write them in character so well.

*shrugs shoulders*

And don't pout you know what that does to me.

[lightrobber.livejournal.com]

Ack, well, but my grammar, use of tenses and sentence structure are the things that bother me the most.

No, I don't know. Care to enlighten me?

[tenchi-saz.livejournal.com]

Ugh, my grammar is not the best but nothing stuck out at me. Especially in the use of tenses, they usually grab my attention.

Wellll, it makes me want to stop you.

[lightrobber.livejournal.com]

Then I have no other choice but to believe you when you say everything's all right, the little paranoid me.

Stop me? I don't think you can.

[tenchi-saz.livejournal.com]

I'd have fun trying.

[lightrobber.livejournal.com]

Ah, I bet. Gf.

[tenchi-saz.livejournal.com]

;*