I've read the second chapter and I absolutely love it!! I love how you introduced your original characters, Victoria, Patrick, Tobias, Grandma Fletcher and even Rebecca. I thought that Rebecca seemed a bit self-centered to me, which I'm sure that's how you intended her to be.
I see a lot of potential in this story. I also loved the way that you wrote Victoria to be the go getter. Wonderful!! It's not often that I get to read a story with strong OC's. You have a wonderful talent and I rank you up there with Pearl. *bows humbly* Which is very high. ^_^
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Date: 2007-04-18 02:58 am (UTC)I see a lot of potential in this story. I also loved the way that you wrote Victoria to be the go getter. Wonderful!! It's not often that I get to read a story with strong OC's. You have a wonderful talent and I rank you up there with Pearl. *bows humbly* Which is very high. ^_^