Date: 2008-09-29 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] femmephantom.livejournal.com
Ooooh, this is getting le good! But if I can nitpick about one tiny little thing. You have Goku say this:

"But what about food, Sanzo? I'm starving! And we had not time to buy anything in the town because..."

About halfway through the chapter. It seems a little too propper for him. Particularly the "we had not time..." bit. Just sayin'.
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